The first few panels, especially with the wind, almost in the woman's hand...I don't want to seem like I'm making light of the obvious gravity in this drawing, but it reminded me of Disney's Pocahontas

Well, maybe there could've been a slight hinting that she was slowly dying...going through itonce it seemed like things were allright and then wham!, she's dead, but perhaps I should look at the words more. All in all, though, very touching.

--
"But I don’t want comfort. I want God, I want poetry, I want real danger, I want freedom, I want goodness. I want sin."--Brave New World

Pocahontas..... I knew I had seen that somewhere before! I was kinda lost of how to show the wind, ohwell it happens.

Oh yes, well I kinda had limited time to show what I could, only being two pages long and all. Truth be told She did come under illness quickly after the wind choose another, it had done this because her time as a Sage came to an end, she choose to live without it, to be in one place even after she had writen it all down, and the wind took itself out of her, and her body having used up it's own life many years ago, died soon after. Though it could have happened in a long amount of time, I made his hair longer in that panel then when you first saw him to ilistrate the movement of time.

Thanks for being critical in any way, it helps alot!

Also thanks for viewing.

--
If a tree falls in the woods and no ones around to hear it does it make a sound?

Of course, just ask a bear!

Keep it up!

--
_{Commissions • • Sketch Blog • • Tutorials}